Balloons

The first time I wrote this story it was very boring but then I went back and added heaps of detail and vocab that made my reading much more interesting to make it a great piece of writing.

Something that has challenged me is when I had to change my whole piece of writing to make it more interesting to make the reader hooked into my writing.

Bang! Bang! We all started hitting the Balloons that were filling up the room you couldn’t move around the room there were so much.

“Ready I’ll stand on the still and throw some of the balloons up in the air,”

“3,2,1”.....

Bang! Bang! POP!!!!!! We all hit the same balloon at the same

time and we popped it, we also popped some when we landed on the ground suddenly the  room was silent...

We all looked at the the balloon and saw it was shredded into 5 little pieces

suddenly everybody started to laugh and laugh.

“Guys,” I whispered

“Who wants to do it again!!!”

“Me!!!!!!!!!!”

“Kids dinner time”.

“Ohhhhh”.

At midnight we all quietly tiptoed into the lounge to play with the

balloons, we finally made it to the lounge but…

Mum had popped all the balloons. “Mum!!!”

Letter to Mathew

Dear Matthew Dellavedova

Hi I’m not Australian I’m a kiwi but I still like you.

I have been researching about you and your sport.

Did you know I am a Basketball player to like you and I’m good at it too.

You are special because even though when you were in the Cavs you were in the second line up you were still trying your best and having fun.

You show perseverance and determination to your country.

You should be proud of yourself Mathew.

I wish you Good luck in the Olympics and “good luck in your Basketball games and hope you win a gold medal or at least a silver. My dream is to go to the Olympics and win a medal.

GO MATTHEW!!! GO AUSTRALIA!!!

Balin Casson

Parkvale School

HASTINGS

I have been trying to make my letter the best I can for my athlete.

I am showing him the respect he needs to win the Olympics.

The learning muscle I used to get out of the pit was my perseverance muscle because I kept on trying to do my personal best.
This week in my letter I used my noticing learning muscle and found little bits of information to add.

I have been learning to push myself to my personal best.

Something that challenged me was to do my personal best to push someone to do something amazing.

I am proud of my work because I kept on try to do my personal best for my Athlete.